Tuesday, February 5, 2008

Silent Ralph: Post # 4

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The mountain top was cold because of lack of fire and tense because Jack just hit Piggy. Piggies glasses flickered in the light as the sun shined on them or maybe because he was crying behind them. The colors were opalescence as they whirled in a circle. I watched Piggie look at his glasses and then to Jack in a malevolent manner. A shrill voice in my head urged me to defend him but something else spoke that made me do otherwise. Jack smiled in glee to implicate that he found this amusing (the fact that Piggy was helpless). But when Jack smiled I stared at him incredulously. It was not only the fact that he was being so impossibly rude to Piggy that angered me, but it was also the behavior that Jack took on after it was "HE" who messed up... not Piggy. Jacks preposterous behavior did nothing to improve my mood. Piggy whimpered when ever Jack looked at him but everyone was too busy collecting wood for the newly made fire to notice. It felt like a mirage when I last saw the smoke. Yet here he was next to Jack collecting fire wood. I stared into my hand ashamed that I had not come to the aid of Piggy when Jack slugged him. But it was because if the hunters turned on me I was dead meat... Literally. But then something unexpected happened. Piggy asked for meat from Jack. He wasn't being rude either. This irrelevance to any sort of anger that Piggy felt for Jack disappered, just because of some meat Piggy was finally accepting Jack's Power... What a shame, we forget ourselves just for a bit of meat.

3 comments:

jakey said...

I really liked haw you used the vocab words

Mr. Shaddox said...

Leyla,

First off all, I'd like to commend you on the creativity that you've put into your blog. It's really a great way to learn more about the book. I'm sure there will be students somewhere in the world who read your blog and gain new insight about the story.

I really like the "frozen moment" quality of your blog. It's as if Ralph has taken a snapshot of the scene and is meticulously studying it. Your conclusive comment "What a shame, we forget ourselves just for a bit of meat," was perceptive. Do you think Ralph realized this before he decided to call the meeting?

REVISION:
Can you add a physical description of what is happening in the beginning of your journal?Describe the action between Jack and Piggy. Where is the action taking place?

Also, check the spelling/punctuation/capitalization of the following words:
nessisary
literely
disappered
Jacks Power

Thanks,
Mr. Shaddox

Leyla said...

Mr Shaddox:

I did the changes. I explained the situation more and fix my spelling and punctuation.

leyla